Bards and Minstrels…
February 10, 2007
This semester at college we have taken this new course with the intriguing name “Bards and Minstrels.” Before you get too interested, it’s just simply a poetry class where we read and struggle to write something which can be classified as poetry.
Now I’ve never read or written poetry in my entire life. Usually, I don’t even understand it till somebody explains it to me. So I’ve never really taken an interest in it.
That’s what everyone in my class says, too. Or maybe a few say that they do like poetry but have never written it. So when a few days back our teacher suddenly told us to write a poem in ten minutes during class, I, contentedly wrote my first non-rhyming, non-flowing non-poetic few lines, satisfied to know that I wouldn’t be the only one spelling out disaster.
But as my luck would have it, it turned out that most of my friends are great poets, masha’Allah! I mean, as each of them read out their brilliant work in class, I got pleasantly surprised, intimidated and all the more self-conscious about my own crap.
But obviously I had to read it when my turn came. Before my turn, I was feeling uncomfortable, dejected and even depressed about my writing. But after I read my poem, I just sat back and told myself that not knowing crap about poetry, if I had managed to even write something which other people can call a poem, that was an achievement.
So without feeling shy and self-conscious, I’m gonna post the very first poem of my life on my blog. There’s no title, really, since the teacher just gave us a word “Blue” to write about. Actually, we were told to think up of 10 words which come to our mind when we think of the word blue and then make a poem outta them. ( I thought of stuff like peace, blue eyes, immenseness-I know immensity is a better word but immenseness came to my mind first so I used it-sue me! Hehe)
I guess “Blue” can be a title but it sounds bleh!
P.s. This is supposed to be divided into paragraphs or whatever you call them, but somehow this stupid blog aint letting me put in the required space!
The peace reflecting fromthe serene warm sea.The flight of the birds
on a pleasant sunny day.
And the fingernails of the
child struggling against the freezing winds.
The cold betrayal of the
penetrating icy glare.
And the bruises left on the
naked battered heart.
The blue of the
blueness of immenseness.
And the blues of the
world I live in.
woooooooooow!!
im soooooo touched and moved by ur peom,this is amazing. sana i couldnt have imagined in my wildest dreams that u r such a good poet, just simply out of this world, especially the line “The blue of the blueness of immenseness”. i have read this line numerous times but i still dont get how blue is the blueness of immenseness? just cant apprehend the depth of this line. amazing work man. keep it up!!
thank God she just gave ten minutes to u, had she given an hour, i would be banging my head against a brick wall now.
did u actually write this urself? i really felt the (blue) IMMENSENESS of ur work, i am moved to the edge of the cliff just write one more such poem and u will leave me with no other option but to jump…
lol. u can delete the first one that was by mistake.
do continue to do poetry i think u have a natural talent.
GOOD LUCK!!
u changed the template nothing is making sense to me now.lol.
oh ballay! I think Z is about to die because of your talent. lol. z: that just shows there’s still alot to be learnt
(one of my random bongies)
And well ST, this really is nice. I don’t really get things if people just read em n i dun have em written infront of me. Thus I did not get your poem in class. but this is really good, though I think you could refine a lil the places where you chose to break the lines like
‘And the fingernails of the
child struggling against the freezing winds.’
My advice, ‘The child’ should have been in one line. But whatever works for you. N Gawd I din’t know blue would be so cold n lifeless for you. I can actually feel the cold, which is partly due to the cold tempelate (which by the way is WAAAAAAY better than the old manuscript one u had pehlay) but its also cozza good writing.
I luved the last line ‘And the blues of the world I live in.’ Aala!
btw, im thinking of making something outta my poem too, perhaps a lil longer n posting it on my blog. good idea for a post missy.
And now that you’re a great established poet, your ‘image poem’ is not going up here, its already booked for read it live
appley try getting the sarcasm, may be this will help u.
sana just a few lines that u can use next time.
The black of the blackness of darkness
The white of the whiteness of snowness
The yellow of the yellowness of sunnyness
The red of the redness of bloodyness
The green of the greeness of grassness
The purple of the purpleness of ur room! [:)]
If u need more feel free to ask…
hey all jokes nothing is to be taken seriously.ok?
inshallah say u’ll do good in this semester(subject) as well, or so i hope.lol. (just joking)
Good luck!! (this time serious)
now dont whine that no one comments on ur blog.lol.
haha…appley u crazy thing…cudnt u c the sarcasm just spillin all over the place? lol..
i told u, z my lovey, that its my first attempt n totally stupid!! im just proud i wrote smth in the name of poetry so u cant make me feel bad!
hehe..
i love u girl..just felt lik sayin so!
n btw…appley…DO NOT change ur poem at all! its AMAZIN as it is masha’Allah..
oh ballay! aap nay meri poem kee tareef kee! I must put it on my blog now
thanks alot waisay
luv ya, jst felt like saying so
hahah…yes u must put it up there so ppl can c da truth in my baat wen i say “my friends turned out to b great poets” n im as sucky as ever! lol
best of luck!